Angel of Death

Hey there Junebug! Haven't read anything from you in a while! I rather liked this. I felt that it was the perfect length and though I usually like the more ...

Hey Ky! It's been a while! I'm not going to focus on grammar or sentence structure or anything, because everything flowed well and your grammar is always impeccable. Content-wise, I ...

Hey Mars! First off, I love the title. It sounds better in French, so I'd keep it this way. He was always so kind to me, and only to me, ...

Hello there! I don't think I've read anything of yours before, but I'm Angel of Death, but everyone calls me Angel. This is my first review in a very long ...

035. Epiphany By Angel of Death The morphine didn't kick in yet. Paul held the beer bottle to his head. Hands smudged in sweat and grease. He breathed in and ...

Attention! Ok, I've been taking my time with this novel. Usually, I'd just write and write and write but this time around, I'm just going to work on developing my ...

EllyMelly Hey there! Welcome to YWS and thanks for your critique. I'm really glad you liked it and that you felt that Mar's emotions were believable because others felt that ...

Hey there JayandKay! I like your username, by the way. :wink: Whoa! Ok, I don't think people know who you two are. But style-wise, I could tell when each of ...

Hey KJ, It feels good to be reading something new of yours. How've you been? I hope all is well and that my critique will be helpful. Turning, turning, the ...

Thanks you two for the critiques! Your writing seems to flow better when there is action and dialogue involved. Hmm? I've always thought it was the other way around, because ...

mizz-iceberg & Esmé Thank you both, so very much for your reviews! Since you both say that I need to show her emotional state, I will try my best to ...

Hey Jiggy! Hopefully, this review will be helpful in some way. They were stacking up; dead men on the side. I don't like this sentence and that's only because I ...

I'm back! The children playing barefoot, boys with stripped, pink chests and the girls in the thin, dirty dresses. I'd nix the underlined 'the' The houses squat around, pale faced ...

Hey there Ky! Seems like I haven't reviewed anything of yours in a while. I didn't read the other comments, so sorry if I repeat anything. The crazy one/the daughter. ...

Hey Jare! Met to take a look at this a while ago, but I'm glad I decided to read it today. I liked it and really enjoyed it, mainly because ...